The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts below show the percentage of
time
working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. In 2008 it is noticeable, that people began to work more than in 1958, the indicators changed from 33% in last
century to 42% in the present. Correct article usage
the last
Instead
, due to
growth
Correct article usage
the growth
of
working Change preposition
in
time
, the
sleeping has decreased from 32% to 25%. And going out Correct article usage
apply
also
enormously declined from 19% to only 6%, as the technologies improved and we began to spent
our free Change the verb
spend
time
in
the Internet. Change preposition
on
However
, in 1958 travel to work was less than 5%, but in 2008 it increased to 8%. Interests are changing all the time
, that's why, other interests or playing sports was 6% and raised to 8% in 2008. The changes, that we see had a big impact on people's livelyhood
, they Correct your spelling
livelihood
livelihoods
also
show as
the difference between working adults in 1958 and 2008.Change preposition
apply
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