An increasing number of people are choosing to have cosmetic surgery in order to improve their appearance. Why are more people choosing to have operation to change the way they look? Do you think this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In
the
recent days, there Correct article usage
apply
was
an increase in the Wrong verb form
has been
amount
of people who are experiencing cosmetic surgery with the purpose Change the quantifier
number
to have
a better appearance. There are some mental factors to contribute to Change preposition
of having
this
behaviour, Linking Words
nevertheless
, Linking Words
this
trend is a negative development because Linking Words
anybody
Correct your spelling
nobody
have
positive things to showcase and nobody is perfect.
Change the verb form
has
To begin
with, the citizens Linking Words
that
experienced Correct pronoun usage
who
a
cosmetic surgery are motivated to look Correct article usage
apply
youngers
and prevent the obvious Correct your spelling
younger
critics
from their relatives and friends. Fix the agreement mistake
criticism
Moreover
, the majority of these individuals suffered from depression and anxiety Linking Words
while
Linking Words
Correct pronoun usage
their self-steem
self-steem
was Correct your spelling
self-esteem
in
Change preposition
at
their
lowest level. Correct pronoun usage
its
For instance
, some boys and girls have to deal with bullying in their schools or universities because of their appearance, and Linking Words
as a result
, they consider Linking Words
to improve
the situation, Change the verb form
improving
to look
Change the verb form
looking
perfects
and Fix the agreement mistake
perfect
portray
in their social networks that they are pretty and happy.
Wrong verb form
portraying
Secondly
, the decision to change their appearance had a negative impact Linking Words
in
Change preposition
on
the
society, since nowadays Correct article usage
apply
it is clear that
nothing in Linking Words
this
world is perfect. Linking Words
Furthermore
, the example for others is that everyone should change what he Linking Words
don't
like about his body Change the verb form
doesn't
instead
of facing Linking Words
the
reality and accepting his nature itself. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, a girl Linking Words
in
Change preposition
on
instagram
would look fascinated to have Change the capitalization
Instagram
a
surgery at an early stage which in some cases could be dangerous physically and mentally.
In conclusion, debate for plastic or cosmetic surgeries is recognised to be crucial in Correct article usage
apply
this
modern era, since many boys and girls Linking Words
desired
always to look good in order to prevent negative comments, but what for some people is considered ugly, for others might be appreciated, just anyone should accept the beauty of his nature.Wrong verb form
desire
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