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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. Explain the problem. Say why the documents are important. Suggest a solution.

#hotel #home #papers #manager #documents
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter because
l
 left some crucial
paper
 when
l
 attended a meeting yesterday at your hotel.
Although
 I forgot where
l
sit
Wrong verb form
sat
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 at
meeting
Correct article usage
the meeting
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 area yesterday,
but
Remove the conjunction
apply
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l
 remembered that
l
 put
this
paper
in
Change preposition
on
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red
Correct article usage
a red
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 map. I left it because
l
 had
phone
Correct article usage
a phone
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 from
wife
Correct pronoun usage
my wife
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 that my children
was
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were
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 sick, and
l
 am hurry to go home so
l
 left
this
 crucial
paper
.
This
paper
 is very crucial for me because it is
agreement
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an agreement
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paper
 and
contract
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a contract
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paper
. It is very important for my office so
l
 must find it. I suggest that you want to help me to check the CCTV. I remembered that
l
 left the hotel at 20.00, so you can check
CCTV
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the CCTV
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 before 20.00. If you found it, please call me as soon as possible. Thank you for
willing
Add a missing verb
being willing
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help
Fix the infinitive
to help
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 me.
Correct the word
Yours
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Your
Correct your spelling
Yours
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 faithfully, Andrianto Raharja
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains one clear main idea and that this idea is fully developed within the paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure of your letter by ordering information and ideas in a way that makes the sequence of events and your requests clear.
task achievement
Your task achievement is generally good, but always make sure to elaborate on key points to strengthen the impact of your letter.
task achievement
Maintain a consistently formal or semi-formal tone throughout the letter based on the target audience you are addressing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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