The diagram below shows a simple system that turns dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph provided,
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the process of filtered
water
and it is very purposive. The first process is when you have
a
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dirty
water
, you can pour the
water
in
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the
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plastic barrel filled with sand, charcoal, and gravel. People need to prepare these materials and
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it
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in one stack inside the plastic barrel. The
water
will
absorp
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absorb
with sand, charcoal, and gravel. The
water
is being filtered with those 3 materials and the dirty
water
is now transformed into
a
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cleaner
water
. The second step is linking the plastic barrel with the storage drum through a pipe so the
water
will be able to flow through that pipe and we could
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path
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of
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the
water
flow. The storage drum is
also
connected through another pipe that can be used for pouring the clean
water
. After going through
filtering
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process, we can conclude that the dirty
water
turns into clean
water
and
it
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is safe for drinking purposes.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Diagram
  • Simple system
  • Dirty water
  • Clean water
  • Overall process
  • Input
  • Output
  • Comparison
  • Relevant
  • Environmental impact
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