The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph
depict
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how much
people
in Germany, France, Italy and Australia spent their
money
on
book
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books
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in 1995 and 2005. In general,
it is clear that
Germany
was
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the highest number of
people
who spent their
money
on
books
from 1995 until 2005 and Austria was the lowest country which spent their
money
on
books
from 1995 until 2003. A lot of
german
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people
who
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spent their
money
on
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the book
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book
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books
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in 2005. Over the period, German
people
who buy a
book
fluctuated. Its increase in 1999 and dripping in 2003
eventhough
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even though
it was not
significantly
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.
This
fluctuated has similiarity with
community
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in
italy
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Italy
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. The
different
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was in 1999
people
in
italy
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who buy
books
dripping than before. The country which increased steadily in
buy
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books
was
france
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France
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.
Whereas
,
number
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the number
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of
people
in Austria
for
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use their
money
on
books
rised
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rose
since
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from
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1995
untill
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until
1999 and steady until 2001
then
massive
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rise until 2005.
Books
become important stuff to buy for some
human
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humans
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. We can get big of information through a
book
. High and low
amount
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amounts
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of
people
who
use
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spend
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their
money
on
books
, it depends on their needs.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, money, book, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rised" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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