The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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the

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book

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Germany

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, Italy, and

Austria

since

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1995 till 2005. In 1995,

Germany

became

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the highest

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book

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with 8

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the second highest with 55

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also

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third place with 50

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, and the lowest spent on

book

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held by

Austria

with 30

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, in 1997,

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in the first position with 85

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while

the

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held by

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with 35

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. In 1999, the

number of

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Germany

France

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increased,

while

Italy decreased

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, in 2001, only

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increased

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while

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decreased to 87

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and

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the exact same number as before.

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, in 2003, Italy and

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did great with increases. Especially

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increased to 60

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and Italy to 59

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. At the same time,

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still

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to 85

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and

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with the same

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Lastly

, in 2005, all of them increased.

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became the highest with 95

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then

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is in 75

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while

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is in 72

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, and Italy is in 62

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The graph shows the amount of money spent on book in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

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