Fresh water has always been a limited resources in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand, and what measures can government and individuals take to respond to this problem.

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Water
resources that can be used as fresh
water
for
day to day
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consumption
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reducing in some parts of the globe
due to
the increasing
number of
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demand
which
lead
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has led
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to a big
issue
. Reasons for escalating
the
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world wide
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worldwide
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demand
due to
growth
of the
number of
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population
and
increase
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the increase
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in
fresh
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freshwater
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water
wastage. We can resolve the problem by controlling
the
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population
growth
by
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government
intervenes
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and imposing some rules to reduce
the
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wastage. It can be seen that the
demand
for fresh
water
has been increasing
since
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last
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the last
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few decades
due to
the rapid
growth
of
population
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the population
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. So many countries
suffering
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suffer
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from
this
issue
not only for
water
consupmtion
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consumption
but
also
for other requirements.
For example
, The birth rate has been increasing and it has reached
to
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a maximum level in some countries which
lead
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has led
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to an increase in
water
consumption for drinking whether those
counries
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countries
have
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lack
of
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water
resources which can be used as fresh
water
.And
also
,
yearly
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the yearly
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consumption of
water
in China
as
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recorded as 362 trillion gallons.
In addition
,
water
wastage is one of the main
issue
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issues
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which contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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water
levels.
Majority
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of people still do not tend to realise the key problem and
contineousely
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continuously
misuse
water
for unwanted activities
instead
of using them for drinking.
For example
, developed countries
such
as
USA
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the USA
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and China consume
water
for their industrial activities. To address these issues, governments should intervene
on
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in
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controlling birth rates by imposing laws to curb the increasing
demand
on
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for
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fresh
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freshwater
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water
atleast
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at least
for the next two decades.
Furthermore
, they can add some taxes to families
whom
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do not comply with regulations which might be a front step for
address
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addressing
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this
problem.
On the other hand
, as a nation, people should have
a
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better
self behaviour
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self-behaviour
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to reduce the
water
wastages
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wastage
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and use them only for hygiene purposes.And
also
,
governmnets
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governments
government
can impose rules and regulations
for
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to
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curb the misuse of fresh
water
by imposing large amount of fines. In conclusion, if there is a
growth
of
demad
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demand
for
freash
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fresh
water
due to
the
escalate
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of
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in
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population
and
water
wastages
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wastage
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governments in the world,
it
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apply
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can manage those problems to
an acceptable levels
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an acceptable level
acceptable levels
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by imposing laws and
heal
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healing
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the
issue
to protect
this
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these
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invaluable
water
resources for future generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limited resource
  • growing worldwide demand
  • industrial growth
  • water-intensive crops
  • prolonged droughts
  • usable water
  • water conservation
  • water efficiency
  • infrastructure
  • fixing leaks
  • water-efficient appliances
  • water waste
  • renewable energy sources
  • water footprint
  • transboundary water basins
  • water-stressed regions
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