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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information concerning five destinations of British people between 2004 and 2007. The data can be divided into two groups, namely the number that experienced an upward trend and a downward trend. It can be clearly seen that the number of British immigrants in Australia was the highest among
five
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the five
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 countries,
while
 that of New Zealand stood
last
. Spain and New Zealand experienced drops, but Australia,
USA
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the USA
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, and France
which
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apply
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mainly showed fluctuations.
To begin
, Spain and New Zealand
initially
 stood at 35,000 and 22,000 in 2004 before a steady fall until 2007 when
it
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they
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 reached about 28,000 and 20,000. Moving on to the figures for Australia, for
USA
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the USA
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, and for France in 2004, the number remained at 42,000, 24,000, and 22,000 respectively. In 2005, the first two slightly decreased to about 39,000 and 19,000, but the latter dramatically increased to 32,000. After that, the figures experienced a noticeable rise and a marked drop between 2006 and 2007.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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