The graph shows the percentage of the Uk adolesents following vegetarian diet.

In 1970, only a small percentage of adolescents (about 1 per cent) were vegetarian. There was

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a steep increase until 1990

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when over 15 per cent were following a vegetarian diet.

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fell steadily until 2000 and

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fluctuated for a decade. It reached a low point of just 4 per cent in 2006. It has risen gradually since 2010 and is expected to

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over the next few years. After reaching a high point in around 2020, it is projected to decline again and possibly level off by the decade's end.

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