You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: ‘Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behaviour is now having a negative impact on society.’ Discuss. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

It is normal for
children
to disrespect
parents
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their parents
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today
then
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than
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in past,
this
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and this
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situation spreads negativity in the community. With
this
developing era, where everything is a click away; traditional and cultural values are
getting faded
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fading
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and
children
are most
effected
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affected
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due to
this
which leaves
whole
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the whole
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society in chaos. One questions the thoughts of
children
that
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apply
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what made them behave like
this
?
Firstly
,
children
today
are more exposed to the vast media and do not consider their
parents
as
knowledgeful
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knowledgeable
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. Youngsters
today
spend maximum time on social media where everything is available irrespective of the content and limitations involved.
This
kind of exposure has enabled a sense of know-it-all in them, ultimately causing a clash of opinion between a parent and child.
For instance
, a teen in Chicago
filled
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filed
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a complaint against
mother
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their mother
his mother
her mother
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for stopping him from playing late.
Such
news came as a shock for the neighbourhood and gave
a
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leverage to other
children
to do the same against their
parents
.
Furthermore
, disrespecting
parents
has become a style and coolness among
this
generation, it has become a way of talking. Showing kindness towards them is outdated and a pitiful act for them.
However
, in past,
children
used to go
an
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the
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extra mile for their
parents
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parent's
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happiness and
this
used to set some high examples for others to follow. It was taught in schools to show love and care for
parents
who brought them up and
nortured
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nurtured
tortured
nurture
them.
For example
, a survey concluded that past generations had out-performed in
acedemia
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academia
as well as
personality development tests
while
present
are
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is
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unable to achieve
bare
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the bare
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minimum.
This
proves how important is a
parent child
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parent-child
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relation full of respect
in
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for
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the child's
overall
growth and development. In conclusion, as compared to the previous generations,
today
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today's
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children
disrepect
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disrespect
their
parents
and leave a society full of negativity.
Openess
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Openness
of
internet
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the internet
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and new trends have brought
this
on and it is important to put some emphasis on cancelling
such
behaviour by different means of counselling and coaching.
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