The charts below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The charts below shows the percentage of people who ate five proportions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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The charts
depicts
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the
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ratio
of
fruits
and
vegetables
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consumption for
children
,
men
and
women
in the UK per day from 2001 to 2008.
Women
were the most
concious
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conscious
for
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dietary nutrition
with
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consuming the highest rate of
vegetables
and
fruits
while
children
were the least
eater
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for
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the
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healthier diet between 2001 and 2008.
At
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the beginning, it started with the lowest data
comparing
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compared
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to the following years until 2008 from any people who consumed
fruits
and
vegetables
. It gradually increased until it reached its peak in 2006
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35
percent
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per cent
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for
female
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females
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and 27
percent
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for
male
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males
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. The
children
experienced the highest rate
for
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healthy
dietary
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in the next year with 26
percent
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per cent
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. After its vivid top in 2006, the data experienced a slight decrease for the next 2 years until 2008. The
last
2 years experienced low disparity for
women
,
men
and
children
for
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consuming
fruits
and
vegetables
. It was only around 1 to 4
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differences between them.
Overall
,
Men
and
children
were remain
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unchanged from 2001 to 2003 with 13
percent
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for offspring and 17
percent
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per cent
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for
male
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males
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.
The
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A
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little difference happened in 2007 and 2008
where
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they
nearly
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were nearly
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positioned in the same ratio.
Men
and
children
were gradually improved more for recommended consumption
while
women
were started in a high position but increased slowly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, vegetables, children, men, women, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dietary habits
  • nutritional intake
  • health-conscious
  • percentages
  • fluctuations
  • peak
  • trough
  • public health initiatives
  • recommended intake
  • demographic differences
  • graphical analysis
  • upward/downward trend
  • health implications
  • national averages
  • gender disparities
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