The bar chart below describes some change about the presentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outsite Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some change about the presentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outsite Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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given
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apply
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bar graphs depict information about the comparison of
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number
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a number
the number
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of
people
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originally
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who originally
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were born inside and outside
Australia
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in three different
area
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areas
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of the country including urban, rural and town in 1995 and 2010. The data is presented by
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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of
people
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described in different
color
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of the bars based on three sites of the country. By and large, it was ubiquitous that the inhabitants
lived
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who lived
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in the city had the highest
percentation
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percentage
in
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of
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both was
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people
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born in
Australia
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or
outsite
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outside
Australia
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over
the
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a
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period of time. Meanwhile, the lowest
number
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came from
people
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lived
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who lived
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in towns in both
period
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periods
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of time. Turning to the statistical data,
people
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were born
ousite
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in
Australia
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and lived in the city hold the highest
number
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accounted
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accounting
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for 60% in 1995 and increased
two
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to
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tenths in 2010.
Likewise
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,
people
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from cities who were born inside the country
also
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had a large proportion between two years
meassured
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measured
for approximately a half
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percent
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per cent
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in 1995 and had a small growth in 2010,
ammounting
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amounting
am mounting
for just over one-sixth
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percent
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per cent
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. Turning to the contrast,
people
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in rural areas who were born
outsite
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outside
Australia
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achieved a huge presentation in 1995
accounted
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accounting
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for forty
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percent
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per cent
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, but it
was
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apply
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dramatically decreased in 2010
for
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to
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under 20
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percent
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per cent
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.
Similarly
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, the other interesting trend from
people
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in towns who were born
insite
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inside
Australia
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hold
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holds
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the largest
number
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in 1995 but
fall
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fell
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sligthly
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slightly
in 2010.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, australia, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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