The bar chart below describes some change about the presentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outsite Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some change about the presentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outsite Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
given
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bar graphs depict information about the comparison of
number
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a number
the number
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of
people
originally
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who originally
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were born inside and outside
Australia
in three different
area
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areas
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of the country including urban, rural and town in 1995 and 2010. The data is presented by
percentage
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the percentage
a percentage
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of
people
described in different
color
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colors
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of the bars based on three sites of the country. By and large, it was ubiquitous that the inhabitants
lived
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who lived
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in the city had the highest
percentation
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percentage
in
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of
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both was
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people
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born in
Australia
or
outsite
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outside
Australia
over
the
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a
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period of time. Meanwhile, the lowest
number
came from
people
lived
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who lived
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in towns in both
period
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periods
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of time. Turning to the statistical data,
people
were born
ousite
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in
Australia
and lived in the city hold the highest
number
accounted
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accounting
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for 60% in 1995 and increased
two
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to
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tenths in 2010.
Likewise
,
people
from cities who were born inside the country
also
had a large proportion between two years
meassured
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measured
for approximately a half
percent
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per cent
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in 1995 and had a small growth in 2010,
ammounting
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amounting
am mounting
for just over one-sixth
percent
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per cent
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. Turning to the contrast,
people
in rural areas who were born
outsite
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outside
Australia
achieved a huge presentation in 1995
accounted
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accounting
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for forty
percent
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per cent
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, but it
was
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apply
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dramatically decreased in 2010
for
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to
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under 20
percent
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per cent
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.
Similarly
, the other interesting trend from
people
in towns who were born
insite
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inside
Australia
hold
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holds
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the largest
number
in 1995 but
fall
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fell
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sligthly
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slightly
in 2010.
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