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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Map of a public park when it first opened in 1920 and today

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The
prodvided
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 layout illustrates the information about
grange park
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Grange Park
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 established in 1920 and the same
place
 is shown with modifications . In the preliminary analysis of the
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 it can be vividly observed that in the year 1920 rose garden which was located
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right
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 side of the map
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 replaced by the cafe in today's time . right next to
rose garden
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Rose Garden
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 a pond of water plants used to be there but now the pond has been demolished and a new facility of
childern's
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children's
 play area has been built over there . the glass house which used to be at the right side of the entrance of
eldon street
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Eldon Street
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 has now been replaced by a water feature after analysing the other aspects of the map it can be observed that a rose garden
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sitting on all
th
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the
 four sides is there at the centre of the park , earlier a fountain was there at
this
place
 .
suprisingly
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, a stage for musicians was shown in 1920 but now it has been knocked down and an amphitheatre for concerts has taken its
place
. after analysing the final aspects of the data it can be established that the
grange park
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Grange Park
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 has undergone various changes in all these years but the major ones are
building
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the building
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 of
children's
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a children's
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 play area and an amphitheatre for concerts . all these alterations have made
this
place
well advanced
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 and more developed than before .
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a logical structure, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Additionally, work on paragraphing to enhance the clarity of each section of your comparison.
introduction conclusion present
Make sure your introduction sets the context for the comparison, and your conclusion effectively summarises the main changes without introducing new information.
supported main points
Support your main points with clear examples and data from the maps. Ensure that each point is explained and compared in a manner that is easy to follow and understand.
complete response
Aim to provide a full response to the task by covering all key features shown on the maps. Work on further developing your ideas to showcase a deeper understanding of the changes that have occurred.
clear comprehensive ideas
Enhance your ideas by providing more detailed descriptions and making comparisons more explicit. This will add depth to your analysis and help the reader grasp the extent of the changes.
relevant specific examples
Incorporate specific examples from the map to demonstrate the changes, and make sure the examples are accurately described and relevant to the point you are discussing.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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