The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The graphs indicate four different categories of UK scholars based on their activities after graduation and postgraduation
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2008, except the ones who started to work full-time.
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, it is explicit that generally, the number of graduates was threefold greater than postgraduates.
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, in both groups, a significant number of students
prefered
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preferred
to go on
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study;
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, only a tiny fraction tended to do voluntary
works
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work
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. Regarding graduates, what stands out from the scheme is that almost all of them, 29,665 individuals, opted to go on
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educations
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education
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.
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, roughly one-third of them were interested in voluntary
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.
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, the statistics of part-time workers and
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were approximately identical. Focusing on postgraduates, it can be seen that only 3000 people were postgraduates. In more detail, among
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cohort, temporary jobs and higher study
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accounted for a great section of their activities; the former consisted of 2,535 students and it was 2,725 for the latter.
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, 1,625 folks were in a status of
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,
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students were obsessed
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as volunteers.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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