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The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010.
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The bar chart illustrates the ratio of pass rate between
male
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 and
female
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 when they test
dirving
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driving
diving
 certification during the period from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 both
of
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men and women were the most in 2000 and they were
least
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 in 1980. Speaking of women
first,
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there were nearly half of people who passed the test, and it rose to around 52% in a decade before it hit
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 high, at around 68%. In the end, it decreased to 64% in 2010. to when it comes to men, it witnessed an upward trend during 40 years.
Inatially
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Initially
, only less than one-third have driving licenses.
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, it increased to about 38% and remained at 49%
approximately
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in
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2000
to2010
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to 2010
.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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