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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opedend, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opedend, kilometres of route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.
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the table gives us information about underground railway systems in London,Paris,
Tokyo
,Washinton,
Kyoto
 and
Los
 Angeles . with
date
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the date
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 of opening ,
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a kilometer
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kilometer
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kilometre
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 of
route
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the route
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also
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a
the
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number of visitors
in
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apply
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per year.
overall
 it can be seen that
the
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apply
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most passengers have visited
Tokyo
 underground
also
 the second one was
paris
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Paris
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,
however
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,
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the level of consumers of underground railway
were
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 at the lowest point in
Kyoto
as well as
Los
 Angeles . regards to two most crowded underground railways
such
 as ,
Tokyo
 which was
open
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opened
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 in 1863
an
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and
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 the
lengeth
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length
 was 394 kilometers the number of passengers
were
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was
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1928 millions ,
additionally
 paris railway
has
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apply
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opened in 1900 but the number of users
were
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was
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1191
millions
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million
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which
were
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was
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 less than
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the useres
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useres
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users
 of
Tokyo
 underground . refers to the
others
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other
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counries
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countries
, namely,
england
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England
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and
washinton
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Washington
 Dc people in there were
useing
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using
underground
raiway
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railway
at
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in
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 the Middle of
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the
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percentage ,(
london
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London
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 775 ,dc 114 ) , even though ,
kyoto
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Kyoto
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 and
los
 angeles have used the
undeground
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underground
raily
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daily
 way at the
bottome
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bottom
 of the list and at the
lowes
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lowest
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 level which was 45 for
kyoto
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Kyoto
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50 for
los
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loss
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tokyo, kyoto, los with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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