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The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.
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The two maps illustrate the appearance of a town in 1990 and
it's
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 present status after constructing a hydroelectric power dam in 2010.
Overall
, it can be noticeable that there
has
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 been significant changes
of
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 the town for
past
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 twenty years.
In contrast
 to the changes, a new lake, a hotel, and
the
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a
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 dam
was
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were
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 built in 2010 . In 1990, There
were
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 a forest
at
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in
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 the north, which was near
to
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the chain of mountains and
a
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 Ancient structure
at
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 the North West side.
Furthermore
, there were
a
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rare plants
an
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 animals by the river.
And
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also
,
at
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 the East, there were villages and irrigated farmlands which were near
to
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the river. In 2010, There were noticeable changes which
includes
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 a lake
at
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on
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 the north side.
In addition
, the
hydroelectronic
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hydroelectric
 dam has been constructed between mountains.
Moreover
,
electracity
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electricity
 towers
has
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 been replaced by rare plants and animals. And
also
, another two
electracity
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electricity
sulpply
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supply
 towers
has
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 been
replacesd
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replaced
 by irrigated farmlands
at
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in
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 the East.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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