The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2001.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2001.
The presented bar chart
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delineate
delineates
the changes in the proportion of two various
acocommodation
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accommodation
accommodations
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namely, households owning and households renting in two states (England and Wales)
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period of nearly nine decades ( 1918 to 2011).
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. We can analyse that clearly at first glance the highest rates between 1918 to 1971
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Households in rented .
On the other hand
,
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households
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in owned
accommodation
caught
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upward
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tendency
today
after
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1971. It is explicitly observed that the changes in
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in rented
accommodation
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not stable. The highest point of
this
option is in 1918 with roughly 75
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in every hundred. Furterhormere, it
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rate that made their position the highest rate in
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graph.
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, in
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year, the lowest proportion of owned
accommodation
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with roughly 21
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in every hundred. In 1971 two
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encounted at %50.
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, the owned
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to
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rise abruptly
in contrast
to
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the rented
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type
's dramatic
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. It can be clearly seen that, In 2001 preseverdes the lowest
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percentage
(31
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in every hundred) of rented
accommodation
and the highest
percantage
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percentage
(69
person
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in every hundred) of own
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of accomodation
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accomodation
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accommodation
.
Overall
,
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rented dominated
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areas before
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1971
after
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and after
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the following years (excluding 1971) owned
type
covered huge proportions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • tenancy
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • proportion
  • residence
  • dwelling
  • shift
  • transition
  • migration
  • fluctuate
  • stabilize
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
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