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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart exhibits information on
Gross
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the Gross
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 Domestic Product (
GDP
) from Information Technology (IT) and
Sevice Industry
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service industry
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 (SI) as
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a pecentage
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pecentage
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percentage
 in the UK between 1992 and 2000.
As
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 an
overall
 perspective,
GDP
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the GDP
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 of both sectors increased during the mentioned time.
GDP
 from IT grew up from about 6 to more than 14
pecent
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per cent
 and the SI raised to approximately 8 from 4 per cent. To look more details, the red diagram which relates to SI
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 shows a speedy growth over a two-year period from 1992 and
then
 it gradually grew up until the end
poit
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point
.
Accirding
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According
 to the chart, the
purpale
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purple
purpose
 graph which gives data on
GDP
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the GDP
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 of IT indicates after a
raise
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rise
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 from 6 to 8
percent
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per cent
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 in
this
 period, it declined about 0.5
percent
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per cent
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 in the next
two-years
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two years
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 and suddenly rocketed to 12 per cent until 1998. It
keeped
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kept
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 the
continous
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continuous
 growth pattern for four years and reached
to
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more than 14
percent
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per cent
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 in 2000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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