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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The two pie charts below show the marital status of the populations of Canada and Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Those pie charts
are examining
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examine
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a comparasion
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comparasion
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comparison
the
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of the
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 marital status between communities in
the
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apply
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Australia
 and in
the
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apply
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Canada
. The
Australia
number
 results are based on the year 1999, which is a year earlier than
Canada
. The
most
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apply
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thing that
pop
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pops
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 up the most in both charts
are
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is
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 the percentage of married populations.
This
 is because the results are the highest
number
 of status among the
citizen
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citizens
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 in there.
Moreover
, public single status and those who never married are the second highest in both countries. People
are
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who are
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 not
in
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apply
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engaged in serious
relationship
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relationships
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 yet in
Canada
 are hitting 46% of
total
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the total
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number
 and almost two times higher than people in
Australia
On the other hand
, the lowest sectors for both countries have bits of
differencies
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differences
. People
are
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who are
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seperated
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separated
 yet still legally married
is
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are
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 in the lowest position in
Canada
. They are only 2% of the total population. Meanwhile,
Australia
 has 1% community in the same sex of marriage
where
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which
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become
Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
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 its lowest
number
 in the chart.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, canada, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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