The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial sectors - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial sectors - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph depicts information about the contribution of three different selected sectors to the UK economy including agriculture, manufacturing and business and financial areas from 1900 to 2000. The data is presented by the percentage figures of selected sectors. By and large, it is ubiquitous that the first two given years gave huge contributions from each sector.
However
, in the following
years
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there was a noticeable reduction
from
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Agricultural and manufacturing areas. As clearly seen from the statistical data, the highest contribution from the agricultural sector was in 1990, accounting for just over a half
percent
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. Compared to the first period, the percentage did not show a big difference, which was just below 50
percent
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.
However
, in the following
year
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it had a significant decrease
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for
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almost
four tenths
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percent
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in 1995
then
continued to decline until a mere 4
percent
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in 2000. Turning to another interesting fraction, the manufacturing sector had the highest percentage in the first year, amounting
for
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approximately 45%.
However
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in the next year, it went down slowly until it received almost 15
percent
in 2000.
In contrast
with business and finance, it started with a tiny fraction (around 5%)
then
rose slightly until nearly a third
percent
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in 2000.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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