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The chart below shows the total number of minutes in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided three categories from 1995 from 2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided three categories from 1995 from 2002.
The chart compares three different types of telephone calls in the United Kingdom over a 7-year period between 1995 and 2002.
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, the residential phone was fairly used by people in the UK to make local calls.
However
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, making local and international calls using mobiles was the least popular during the period shown. In 1995, UK residents spoke to locals for about 72
billion
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minutes
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 with fixed
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, which was nearly twice as high as those who used fixed
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 for national and international vocal connections.
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, a small number of people went to cell phones,
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 the figure remained fairly constant until 1998, and
then
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 increased considerably until 2002 reaching just over 45
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minutes
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. Local calls with residential
lines
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 experienced a steady rise peaking at 90
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minutes
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 in 1999, and
then
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 decreased by about 17
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minutes
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 until 2002. A glance at national and international calls from fixed
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, the number of
minutes
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 grew gradually, doubling in 2002, compared to the figure in 1995 at 38
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minutes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, minutes, lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Telecommunications
  • Long-distance calls
  • Local calls
  • International calls
  • Duration
  • Fluctuation
  • Incline/Decline
  • Significant
  • Trend
  • Statistical data
  • Billion
  • Minutes
  • Graph/chart interpretation
  • Incremental growth
  • Stabilize
  • Peak
  • Dip
  • Plummet
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