The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.
The graphs illustrate the amount of money that
parents
invested in their
children
's
sports
activities and make a comparison of the
number
of
children
joining different types of
sports
in British from 2008 to 2014. It is obvious that the
parents
tended to spend more money for
children
to participate in
sports
over six years.
While
football was always attractive to a
number
of
children
the most over the same period, athletics just began to be paid attention to from the half of the period. In 2008,
parents
in Britain spent just £20 on
children
's
sports
,
then
the expenditure grew continuously, and by 2014, the figures for British
parents
' spending achieved more than £30. Looking at the participating numbers, in 2008, around 8
million
children
played football,
while
just about 2
million
joined athletics, and below 1
million
children
went swimming. The figures for football still remained relatively stable over the following six years, with the
number
of
children
taking part being around 8 - 9
million
.
By contrast
, the
number
of
children
attending swimming had risen to nearly 4
million
in 2014, and there was a fivefold increase in the figures for practising athletics.
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