The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.
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The graphs illustrate the amount of money that
parents
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invested in their
children
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's
sports
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activities and make a comparison of the
number
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of
children
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joining different types of
sports
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in British from 2008 to 2014. It is obvious that the
parents
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tended to spend more money for
children
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to participate in
sports
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over six years.
While
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football was always attractive to a
number
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of
children
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the most over the same period, athletics just began to be paid attention to from the half of the period. In 2008,
parents
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in Britain spent just £20 on
children
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's
sports
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,
then
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the expenditure grew continuously, and by 2014, the figures for British
parents
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' spending achieved more than £30. Looking at the participating numbers, in 2008, around 8
million
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children
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played football,
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just about 2
million
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joined athletics, and below 1
million
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children
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went swimming. The figures for football still remained relatively stable over the following six years, with the
number
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of
children
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taking part being around 8 - 9
million
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.
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, the
number
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of
children
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attending swimming had risen to nearly 4
million
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in 2014, and there was a fivefold increase in the figures for practising athletics.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words parents, children, sports, number, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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