The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.
These bar charts show
that
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apply
different
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a different
area
for the Fix the agreement mistake
areas
people
who were born in Asturalia
and who were born outside Correct your spelling
Australia
Australia
. It is clear from the graphs that the number of population that they living in cities much
more than the others.
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is much
According to
what is shown, the pecent
of Correct your spelling
percentage
people
who living
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live
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in
the
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is decrease
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at
the same level Change preposition
apply
at
1995 to 2010 for Change preposition
from
people
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whose
in
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is in
Australia
.Similarely
, for the Correct your spelling
Similarly
people
which their
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whose
outer
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is outer
Australia
their proportion decrease
until they become close to each other.
As for the Correct subject-verb agreement
decreases
people
who living
in cities their Change the form of the verb
live
percentge
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percentage
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has
is go
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is gone
is going
about
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by about
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per cent
people
were
born inside Correct pronoun usage
who were
Australia
and outside Australia
during
15 years.
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To sum up
, we could say that the proporion
of Correct your spelling
proportion
people
who were born outside Australia
is more than who were born in Australia
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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