A man called Pete who is friend of friend, is planning to visit town. Write a letter to Pete. In your letter introduce yourself suggest somethings to do in your town mention one thing you would not recommend
Dear
pete
,
I hope you are doing really well.I am writing Change the capitalization
Pete
Nipun
.I assume you recall that our mutual friend Sam.I am writing Change preposition
to Nipun
this
letter to give you some basic idea about Melbourne
.
Myself and Sam are very close friends form
school ages.Sam finds me as the best person to write Correct your spelling
from
this
letter about your town visit.I work as a taxi driver who's driving around the city through-out
the day so you won't be Correct your spelling
throughout
dissapoint
with my Correct your spelling
disappointed
advices
.
on Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
one
hand,Correct article usage
the one
Melbourne
is pretty
good place Add an article
a pretty
to
you to visit not just because Change preposition
for
in
Change preposition
apply
this
town have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
most
friendly people but Correct article usage
the most
also
it
is very entertaining Correct word choice
because it
by
Change preposition
because of
vast
number of differtant Change the article
a vast
the vast
activites
and events like live music bands,outdoor gathrings and good Correct your spelling
activities
resturants
with Correct your spelling
restaurants
dilicious
food types.You will Correct your spelling
diverse
also
love visiting Melbourne
festival that Correct article usage
the Melbourne
listed
Add a missing verb
is listed
up
next.Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
,I recommend you to vist
and try the best hat Correct your spelling
visit
resturant
called "Correct your spelling
restaurant
fusiongastronomy
".Correct your spelling
fusion gastronomy
fusion-gastronomy
I
is Correct pronoun usage
It
a
Change the article
an
experiance
you should enjoy.
Correct your spelling
experience
Moreover
,there is a situation that I experianced
and would not recommend Correct your spelling
experienced
what so ever
is the Correct your spelling
whatsoever
Melbourne
carnival
Capitalize word
Carnival
on
Change preposition
in
west
of Add an article
the west
this
town.I have
some bad Wrong verb form
had
experiance
there some ago.I have Correct your spelling
experience
experiences
know
Change the verb form
known
by
that there Change preposition
apply
are
a wallet Change the verb form
is
steeling
group Correct your spelling
stealing
walk over
for Correct your spelling
walkover
lessiurs
.
I hope Correct your spelling
lessors
this
letter will help you a lot.Inaddition
I am hoping to Correct your spelling
In addition
writing
to you more.
Take care.Change the verb form
write
keep
in touch.
NipunCapitalize word
Keep
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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the letter needs improvement. It's important to organize information clearly and logically. Consider using more transitional phrases to connect your thoughts and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are casual but could be improved to be more appropriate for someone who is not a close friend. Use more formal or polite expressions in your opening and closing statements.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clarity. Avoid mixing different suggestions or information in the same paragraph to maintain coherence.
task achievement
The letter partially completes the task, but some parts require further development. Be sure to introduce yourself more formally, as Pete is not a close friend. Offer a more comprehensive list of suggestions and elaborate on why you don't recommend the carnival for a complete response.
task achievement
The tone of the letter fluctuates between informal and semi-formal. Select a consistent tone throughout that's suitable for writing to someone you haven't met personally. Avoid slang or overly casual language.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.