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You are looking for a full-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: • introduce yourself • explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have

#job #employment #agency #sort #skills
dear sir, I hope
this
 letter finds you well.I am writing
this
 letter in connection with seeking
for
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a full-time
work
 opportunity. My name is Nipun Perera and I am 27 years old.I completed my higher education at William Angills Institute as a graduated chef.I
also
 archived Master Chef first place in 2022
while
 I was working in Hotel Batta.
In addition
, I am a young and strong person who can
work
 11 to 13 hours.
Moreover
,based on my culinary experience I would prefer jobs in the hospitality industry.Especially in kitchens.I
also
being
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 eligible to
work
 in any
kitchen
 situation.
For instance
 fusion kitchens,fast
pased
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paced
passed
kitchen
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 or fine dining kitchens.
Furthermore
,I have
got
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two years of
work
 experience in a fine-dining
kitchen
 and another two years of part-time
work
 knowledge
by
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working in a seafood
kitchen
.I am a highly skilled and very energetic person who can hard
work
.
Lastly
, regarding
this
information
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 I hope you will help me find a full-time job. Looking forward to hearing from you. yours sincerely, Nipun Perera
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logical structure
Ensure that your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Your introduction should set the tone, the body paragraphs should each cover one point you wish to communicate, and the conclusion should neatly close your correspondence.
greeting and closing
Use a formal greeting (e.g., 'Dear Sir or Madam') and a formal sign-off (e.g., 'Yours faithfully') when you do not know the recipient's name, to adhere to proper letter writing conventions.
single idea per paragraph
Try to focus on a single idea per paragraph, and develop it fully before moving on to the next point. This can be achieved by using topic sentences and supporting details.
complete response
Be sure to completely answer all parts of the prompt. Expand on your experience and skills, explain how they are relevant to the jobs you are seeking, and also mention your availability or any other requirements you might have for a job.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistently formal tone throughout the letter. Avoid casual language and contractions, and use polite and professional phrases to convey your message.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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