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A man called Pete who is friend of friend, is planning to visit town. Write a letter to Pete. In your letter introduce yourself suggest somethings to do in your town mention one thing you would not recommend

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Dear Pete, I am Amanda's friend who is our common friend. My name is
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 and I'm living in Shiraz Iran where you want to visit
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next January.
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 Amanda asked me to write you
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 letter as a mention for a better plan
regurdless
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regardless
 of any forces , just to keep my view in your mind for a cheer
journy
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journey
 without wasting time. As your trip starts in winter and the weather in our city is cold and freezing at
nights
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, I suggest you
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visit the historical places during the day and plan for traditional restaurants where you can find a variety of delicious
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 of
persian
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 foods from evening to midnight :
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, You can communicate with my kind friends and other new people that are
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famous
 for their
hospitallity
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hospitality
 all around the world ;
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, the only point that you should be
carefull
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careful
, is not to drink
alcohaolic
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alcoholic
 drinks in public places. I am in reach for any
quastion
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question
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 and help that you need. With best wishes,
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Structure
Ensure your letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The letter should start with a proper greeting, followed by well-organized paragraphs, each with a specific idea, and end with an appropriate closing statement.
Introduction
Introduce yourself more formally to Pete since you have not met before. A brief introduction about how you know Amanda and a welcoming sentence can create a positive tone.
Paragraphs
Divide your letter into clear paragraphs: one for the introduction, one or more for suggestions and activities, and another for warnings or things to avoid.
Greeting and Closing
Use a proper salutation at the beginning (e.g., 'Dear Pete,') and a suitable closing (e.g., 'Looking forward to meeting you,' 'Warm regards,' etc.) to frame your letter correctly.
Content
Be clear and concise when suggesting activities. Mention specific places to visit, dining options, and cultural insights. Offer clear advice on what to avoid and why.
Tone
Consider adopting a more formal tone and polite language to improve the overall impact of your letter. Avoid phrases that sound too casual or out of place in a formal introduction.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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