The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The four pie charts demonstrate the proportion of different
electricity
production in four different countries (
India
, Sweden, Morocco and
Vietnam
) from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
,
it is clear that
Vietnam
and Morocco did not use nuclear
energy
to generate
electricity
.
While
fossil fuel was the largest source of
energy
in
Vietnam
and
India
, only a mere of
this
source
use
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is used
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for
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produce
energy
in Sweden.
Energy
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The energy
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produced by fossil
fuel
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fuels
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made up
for
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apply
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56% and 82% in
Viet nam
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Vietnam
and
India
respectively but only a tiny 5 % of it
are
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is
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used in
India
. The rest of
electricity
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the electricity
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in
Vietnam
and Morocco was produced solely from
hydro power
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hydropower
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. With regards to the remaining sorts of
energy
in other countries, fossil fuel represented more than four-fifths of the entire quantity of
electricity
produced, which was the highest percentage among
four
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the four
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countries.
In contrast
, only a mere 4% of
this
source was generated in Sweden, but hydro and nuclear power
contributing
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contributed
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52% and 44%
correspondingly
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respectively
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, vietnam, energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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