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The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The four pie charts demonstrate the proportion of different
electricity
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 production in four different countries (
India
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, Sweden, Morocco and
Vietnam
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) from 2003 to 2008.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Vietnam
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 and Morocco did not use nuclear
energy
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 to generate
electricity
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.
While
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 fossil fuel was the largest source of
energy
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 in
Vietnam
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 and
India
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, only a mere of
this
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 source
use
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is used
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for
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to
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 produce
energy
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 in Sweden.
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Energy
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The energy
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 produced by fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 made up
for
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apply
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56% and 82% in
Viet nam
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Vietnam
 and
India
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 respectively but only a tiny 5 % of it
are
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is
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 used in
India
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. The rest of
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electricity
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the electricity
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 in
Vietnam
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 and Morocco was produced solely from
hydro power
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hydropower
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. With regards to the remaining sorts of
energy
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 in other countries, fossil fuel represented more than four-fifths of the entire quantity of
electricity
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 produced, which was the highest percentage among
four
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the four
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 countries.
In contrast
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, only a mere 4% of
this
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 source was generated in Sweden, but hydro and nuclear power
contributing
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contributed
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 52% and 44%
correspondingly
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respectively
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, india, vietnam, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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