Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change
Since the
big bang
, numerous sources, Correct your spelling
Big Bang
such
as human activities, have had a negative impact on plants and animals. Some people
believe that the negative impact of human activities on the environment cannot be changed, while
others believe that action can be taken by humans to save the planet. Although
it is difficult to create change, I believe that people
can make a difference through their behavior
.
On the Change the spelling
behaviour
on
hand, it is true that it is difficult to change Correct your spelling
one
people
behaviour in Change noun form
people's
short
term. Correct article usage
the short
Such
as we cannot change our habits and behaviours quickly. however
it is possible to save our Add a comma
however,
world
. Such
as nowadays people
have awareness
Correct article usage
an awareness
about
ecology and recycling is more common now Change preposition
of
comparing
to previous. But there are Wrong verb form
compared
another
big steps that Replace the adjective
other
people
could do
. Verb problem
take
For instance
, if people
reduce using their own private cars, it will definetely
be less air pollution Correct your spelling
definitely
on
the air. Change preposition
in
Thus
, even though it will take time, there is a chance to save our world
.
On the other hand
, in
our Change preposition
apply
world
changes
rapidly. new constructions Wrong verb form
is changing
build
by humans every passing day. And it will continue Change the form of the verb
built
due to
human needs. However
, according to
the scientist irregular urban planning cause air pollution. For instance
, in New York City more than 2000 skyscrapers built
in 50 years. Add a missing verb
were built
for
this
reason, a remarkable amount of trees are cut down. Moreover
, hundreds of insects loss
their nests because of new buildings. Replace the word
lose
In addition
, world
will become Add an article
the world
Correct article usage
an unliveable
unliveable
place Correct your spelling
unlivable
bacause
of Correct your spelling
because
humans
behaviour.
In conclusion, it is controversial that some Change the noun form
human
people
think it is impossible to do something for the world
, while
others believe there is always opportunity
to do something for our planet. I firmly believe that if every person Add an article
an opportunity
the opportunity
take
Change the verb form
takes
responsability
, we can make Correct your spelling
responsibility
differences
.Fix the agreement mistake
difference
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task achievement
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