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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two layouts show how a university's
sports
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centre
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 may evolve in the future
as a result
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 of planned improvements.
Overall
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, the changes result in an increase in the size of the
sports
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facility
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.
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, the
facility
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 has undergone considerable alterations
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 of the planned enhancements. A 25-meter-long
pool
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 is now located in the
centre
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 of the
sports
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 complex.
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, the
pool
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 is flanked by a changing room, a gym, a lounging area, and a reception area situated to the
west
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, north, east, and south of the university's
sports
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centre
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.
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, there are two outdoor courts located on the
facility
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's
west
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 and east sides.
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 plans, the university
sports
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centre
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 will expand in size as additional departments are added. The 25-meter-long
pool
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 and its environs (change rooms, gym, seats, and reception) will remain in place. The gym,
on the other hand
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, will be enlarged to the east.
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, an extra
pool
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 will be erected to the
west
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 of the
sports
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facility
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 in place of the western outdoor court.
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pool
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 will be utilised for leisure activities.
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, to the
west
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 and east of the entrance, a
sports
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 store and café will be open.
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, there will be an expanded dance studio and a changing room to the east of the
sports
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centre
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.
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introduction conclusion present
Ensure that introductory and concluding paragraphs are clearly demarcated and contain summarized information relevant to the graphic depiction. Introduction should set the context and the conclusion should recap the main trends without introducing new information.
supported main points
While your response contains main features and developments, including more specific details and making comparisons between the current and future layouts would enhance clarity and coherence.
relevant specific examples
Your essay addresses the task sufficiently; however, strive for a more in-depth description by comparing the two plans in relation to each other, which will help illustrate the transformation more vividly.
logical structure
Work on the logical flow of information. Use a variety of linking words and phrases to ensure clear progression between ideas. Also, consider organizing the text into distinct paragraphs, each covering specific aspects of the plans.
clear comprehensive ideas
Ensure your ideas are clearly presented and that they comprehensively cover the key features of the illustration. Each paragraph should have a clear central theme, which is expanded upon with relevant details.
complete response
Your essay fulfills the task requirements by summarizing the main features of the sports centre's current and future plans. To improve task achievement, focus on fully developing each point of comparison and provide specific examples where possible.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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