The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The histogram illustrates the data from a survey about
coffee
and tea buying and drinking habits in five
cities
in Australia.
Overall
, it is evident that the number of people who bought fresh
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
in Melbourne has peaked compared to other
cities
,
while
the individuals who went to a cafe for
coffee
or tea in the
last
4
weeks
in Brisbane and Adelaide are lacking compared to other
cities
. Looking for more details, the data of people who spent time purchasing fresh
coffee
in the
last
4
weeks
in Melbourne has
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at 63%, in Hobart is around 62% and
similarly
, in Sydney is around 61% respectively.
In contrast
, the individuals who went to
cafe
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cafes
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for
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to
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purchase
coffee
or tea in the
last
4
weeks
in Brisbane and Adelaide
lacked
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were
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approximately 33%. Regarding
to
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the rate of individuals
bought
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who bought
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instant
coffee
in  the
last
4
weeks
in Hobart was
higest
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higher
compared to other
cities
at around 50%.
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