some people believe that children should learn how to cook and prepare food in their lessons. what is your opinion about that.

Cooking and preparing classes are the elementary and essential skills that everyone must have. Nowadays, various people believe that youngsters should study cuisine in their school time. So, I agree with the fact that children should have cookery skills, which is the one of soft skills that might be their future career.
To begin
with, studying cooking has numerous benefits for kids in vast ways.
Firstly
, cooking is the basic talent that every person should have
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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