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The bar chart provides information about how much earnings from export activity of a country while the table illustrates the proportion of change in values from 2015 to 2016.

The bar chart provides information about how much earnings from export activity of a country while the table illustrates the proportion of change in values from 2015 to 2016.
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The bar chart below gives data about the
amount
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 of income received from the goods that are sold outside the country
whereas
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, the table shows the number of variations in percentage between two years .
Overall
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, Petroleum
products
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 have got the highest
amount
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 of money received whilst,
Textiles
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 have the least export earnings.
Moreover
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,
Textiles
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 have the highest percentage change in values
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in
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 contrast, Agricultural
products
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 have got the lowest
amount
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. In 2015 and 2016 Petroleum
products
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 have got the highest income coming from exports.
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,Engineered goods were the second highest followed by Gems and jewellery.Neither Agricultural
products
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 nor
Textiles
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 were above 40 billion dollars.
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, the percentage of
Textiles
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 in 2015 and 2016 was 15.24% and it was the highest followed by Engineered goods which has an upward
amount
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 of 8.5%.Again both Petroleum
products
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 and Agricultural
products
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 have the minimum recordings and they are less than 4.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, products, textiles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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