You want to sell your bicycle. Your friend has told you that his cousin might like to buy it from you. Write a letter to your friend’s cousin. In your letter explain why you are selling the bicycle describe the bicycle and how much it will cost suggest a date when your friend’s cousin can come and see the bicycle Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ………………… You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

Dear Ranvir, I hope you are in excellent health and great spirits. I am writing to you because your cousin who visited us
last
weekend informed me that you recently started to
going
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for
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French classes and you are planning to purchase a bicycle for commute purposes. I have a bicycle which I have been planning to sell
from
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a long
time
but I have been very busy
from
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last
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couple of months,
therefore
I was not getting the
time
to take it out to sell. I was certain after talking to your cousin that
this
was the perfect opportunity to sell the
bike
. It is a Honda Hero 23D model which is black in colour. I bought it 2 years ago for fitness purposes but barely got the
time
to use it, so it is almost new. I am planning to purchase a smaller
bike
for my older child who is turning 9 years
next
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week and once we get a new
bike
, our garage will not have enough space for
this
one. My initial plan was to sell
if
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it
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for $200 CAD,
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because you are my friend's cousin and I am in a hurry to get rid of it, I am willing to
negotitae
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negotiate
. Please find the attached pictures of the
bike
and if you like it, we can arrange some
time
next week to meet up. I look forward to your prompt response. Kind regards, Jahnvi
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a separate idea. The second paragraph could be divided to improve clarity and coherence.
task achievement
Although the task is mostly complete, there's room to expand on the description of the bicycle and provide more detailed reasons for selling it to fully satisfy the task requirements.
task achievement
Be aware of the informal tone used in expressions like 'get rid of it'. Try to maintain a consistently semi-formal to formal tone appropriate for writing to someone you may not know personally.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to include a proper closing to your letter, such as 'Yours sincerely' followed by your name, to fulfill the letter format requirements.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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