You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learned from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: - State your reason for writing - describe the problem and your concerns - explain what you would like the Principal to do

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
to express my
dissapointment
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disappointment
about the cancellation of
summer
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the summer
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work
programme
. I came to New Zealand
for studying
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Business English and now that I know that the
programme
has been cancelled, makes me feel extremely terrible. I always wanted to learn about business
english
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English
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for my professional growth. When I got to know that
in
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this
summer, we
will
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be learning professional
english
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, I was very excited and I cancelled my trip to Australia with my family. I am worried that the cancellation of
this
subject would impact our development and we will
get
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refrain from gaining practical experiences. I understand that you have your reasons
to cancel
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this
programme
.
However
, if you can provide any alternative arrangements
and
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I would
also
like to know the reason for
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the cancellation
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cancellation
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the cancellation
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of
this
programme
. Please consider the chances of reinstating the
programme
. Sincerely, Navneet
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clear paragraphing with each paragraph focused on a single idea. Paragraphs seemed to contain multiple ideas which impacted the logical flow.
coherence cohesion
Use varied and appropriate cohesive devices to improve the flow and clarity of the letter.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task with sufficient detail. Certain areas could have been elaborated, particularly potential solutions or alternatives you would like to see implemented.
task achievement
Consider using a more formal tone consistently throughout the letter, suitable for the intended recipient, the School Principal.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work placement programme
  • language development
  • professional growth
  • alternative arrangements
  • practical experience
  • disappointment
  • concerns
  • reinstating
  • feasibility
  • constructive solution
  • immediate attention
  • proactive measures
  • compensation
  • repercussions
  • correspondence
  • clarification
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