Your share your room with another student in the college hostel. You find it very difficult to study there because he or she always has parties and friends visiting. Write a letter to the hostel warden complaining about your displeasure with the room mate.

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Dear Sir or Madam, Hope you are doing well. Let me introduce
my self
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I am Vijay from
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faculty. I am writing
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letter to express my dissatisfaction
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my roommate. Currently, I am living with
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Jay and he has lots of friends
on
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in
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college
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the college
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hostel that
coming
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to our room every single day. It makes me uncomfortable for being there.
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, he makes the other
student
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in a
collage
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hostel distracted. It is because he playing the music loudly.
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, he
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stole my pencil and book but he
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not
confessed
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.
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result
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I failed my exam because I
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not
to
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sleep well until morning.
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situation
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been almost two months.
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, he quite often
invite
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his friends to visit our room.
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situation makes me
can not
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to sleep.
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, he played until midnight with his friends.
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incident can no longer be tolerated. I need your advice to make
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. And
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I hope you are considering my request.
Impatienly
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to hear your positive feedback. Best Regards,
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph presents a single, clear idea to improve coherence. Focus on paragraph structure, with clear topic sentences and supporting details.
coherence cohesion
The letter is somewhat disorganized and contains grammatical errors that make the text difficult to follow. Work on sentence structure, punctuation, and proper use of connecting words to improve readability.
coherence cohesion
Use a clear and appropriate opening and closing for the letter. Address the recipient correctly and sign off in a formal manner suitable for the context of writing to an authority figure.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task more effectively. Clearly state the purpose of your letter early on, and ensure that you cover all points requested, such as a detailed explanation of the issue, the effect on you, and a proposed solution or request for action.
task achievement
The tone of the letter fluctuates between informal and formal. Since this is a letter to an authority, maintain a consistent formal tone throughout. Avoid slang and casual language.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • hostel warden
  • cohabitation
  • disruptive behavior
  • communal living
  • academic performance
  • conducive to studying
  • nocturnal activities
  • amicable resolution
  • accommodation request
  • policy enforcement
  • distraction
  • sleep deprivation
  • noise level
  • mediate
  • courtesy
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