The diagram below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps provide
the
information Correct article usage
apply
of
Grange Change preposition
on
Park
in 1920 and today.
Overall
, the park
had changed to a greater focus on attraction at the expense of green spaces. Even though the park
did not have size
change, many of the layouts had been moved and abolished Correct article usage
a size
whereas
some parts did
not Verb problem
were
alter
.
In 1920, there was a fountain in the centre of the Wrong verb form
altered
park
which became the first thing that people saw when walking through the south or north entrance. In
the left side of the Change preposition
On
park
, there had been
a Wrong verb form
was
stage
for musicians which people can
enjoy from four seats that Wrong verb form
could
was
located diagonally to the Change the verb form
were
stage
. Two of the rose gardens were in the front and the back of the stage
, while
one was positioned to the left of the water plants pond, which was in the right corner of the park
. To the bottom left corner, there had been a glasshouse and one seats
.
Change to a singular noun
seat
While
the park
today remained with the same entrances, rose
garden had been planted in the centre to replace the fountain, with four seats surrounding it. The Correct article usage
a rose
stage
had been removed to construct an amphitheatre. However
, the rose garden in the top left corner still exists. There had been new additions to attract people, such
as cafe
, children's play area, and water feature Correct article usage
a cafe
in
the right side of the Change preposition
on
park
. Underground car park
had Fix the agreement mistake
parks
also
been built to fit vehicles.Submitted by ieltswriting91 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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