It is said that when recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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choosing a deserving candidate for
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job
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, but few individuals give more priority to their capabilities rather than
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knowledge and skills, so
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partially
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support
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notion and my viewpoints regarding
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believe that personal qualities are
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important to selecting
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employee
like honesty and dedication. if an
employee
has these qualities
then
he/she will add more value
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work.
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has
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attitude toward his work
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on the other hand
,
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director should not
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ignore
qualification
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criteria
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assigning a new worker. because without relevant
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academics
any working individual will not complete any project.
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, if chief executives are hiring an
employee
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software
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developer, so
employee
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programing
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so without
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he cannot work in
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field.
furthermore
, experience
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criteria
is
also
important and most
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companies
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the companies
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prefer to hire
such
employee
who has long time experience in their job.
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, if any construction company is hiring workers to
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construct
a building
then
experienced workers will get first priority to get
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a job
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. in
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conclusion
,
although
I agree that personal qualities are important when
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to others yet,
some
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technial
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technical
jobs
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theoretical
knowlege
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knowledge
is more important.
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For Coherence and Cohesion, organize your essay with clear paragraphs, each supporting a central idea. Use a range of linking words effectively to help with the flow of the essay. Ensure you have a discernible logical structure.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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