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The chart below gives information about how people aged25-34 are housedin the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about how people aged25-34 are housedin the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting on the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given bar chart compares how British citizens,
age
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aged
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 25-34
constructs
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construct
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 new
building
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buildings
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 and the number of new
renters
 over
the
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apply
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time. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
,
it is clear that
,
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 the
renters
 experienced an upward trend,
while
 the
amount
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number
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 of
home owners
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homeowners
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 witnessed
an
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a
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 downward trend throughout the period. In 2004, the residents of London owned their houses over 50% and
this
 figure remained
same
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the same
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 until 2009. After that, the percentage of building owners decreased in the next three following years, which was over 40% and reached exactly 40% in 2012.
Then
 their shares again declined in 2014, about 35%.
In addition
 with flat
renters
, in 2004 they acquired only 20% which was almost 4% less than owners.
Then
 it showed
gradual
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a gradual
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increased
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increase
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 rate. From 2005 to 2008, they had rented flats over 20%. Again
percentage
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the percentage
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 of new British
renters
 continued to increase. In the years 211 and 2012 their rate
were
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was
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 nearly
same
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the same
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, approximately 41% and escalated to almost 47% in 2014.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words renters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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