In the past, most people worked for small businesses, while more people now work for large businesses. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for large businesses?
Due to
advances in technology and the job market, many people who worked
in small companies nowadays work for large ones. Certainly, there are positive and negative points in both places. Wrong verb form
work
This
essay will discuss what are the advantages and disadvantages of working for a huge business.
On the one hand, working for a huge company can be a great experience once workers have more opportunities and better conditions of job that lead to a satisfactory salary. These benefits can motivate individuals to choose this
kind of site rather than small companies. For instance
, working for a large and well-known company sited in big metropolitans, the worker has more chance to choose where city he wants to live. In other words
, the person has more opportunity to know other cities, and cultures and this
way to improve his networking.
But
Correct word choice
On
on the other hand
, having a job in a huge company can lead to competition among workers in order to promote an uncontrolled rance for being promoted and also
a life without work-life balance owing to excess of activities. For example
, the worker always needs to find out ways to stand out of
Change preposition
from
crowd
. Correct article usage
the crowd
In addition
, this
competition among people is unhealthy, damaging their mental health. The more individuals are thinking
only about occupation, money, and promotion, the more mental and physical disorders they will have. Damaging mental health is not worth it.
In conclusion, there are a plethora of pros and cons to working for large companies. People need to make decisions balancing both sides. Wrong verb form
think
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Introduction
Ensure that your introduction sets a clear framework for the essay. The current introduction could have more clearly outlined the forthcoming advantages and disadvantages.
Main Points
Body paragraphs should each focus on a single clear idea, supported with specific examples or further explanation. Some points in the essay could benefit from more specific examples and less generalization.
Conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes the essay but could provide a stronger final thought or personal insight into the topic.
Cohesion
Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence that clearly states the main idea of that paragraph.
Cohesion
There were some instances of repetitive phrasing and unclear pronoun references. Vary your sentence structures to improve flow, and ensure that pronouns clearly refer to specific antecedents.
Task Response
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Your opinion
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