The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent

their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart displays
an
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usual expenditure by each family per week, commencing 1968 to 2018.
Overall
, in both years, the majority of families spent their wages on food and residential sectors, compared to the gas need which was
being
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the least among the others. In 1968, most of the
the
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households used their funds for food supplies with figures
just
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over one-third. In
comparasion
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comparison
, they
were
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seemingly only spent around 7% of their
the
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wages
in
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on
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fuel and power needs.
On the other hand
, the necessity for the primer goods in each family was approximately
at
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10%, followed by
the next expenditures rate
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the rate of the next expenditure
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which was slightly lower than the primer was the need for some enjoyments. With percentages almost around 8%, transport, home
equipments
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equipment
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, and personal needs were
being
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the second least. Fifty
year
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later, many households switched their highest spending on leisure time with figures increased by about 15% than previously. Housing and meal categories being the next spending, reached almost 20% and 18% respectively. Not only the increased money to fulfil their spare time, the transport part
also
surged by about 7%. Three other categories which were collapsed during
this
period of time were clothing, gas, and personal necessities, all were under 5%. Meanwhile, the only sector
remained
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static was
households
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goods.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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