You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you want to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Write a letter to the train company. In your letter * Describe the problem you had with the tickets * Say why you were unhappy with the staff * Suggest what action the train company should take

Dear Sir or Madam, I
write
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to letter because we had a problem
last
week. My best friend and
me
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,
we
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I
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bought a
train
ticket for our journey
on
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online,
However
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when ı came to
station
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the station
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we
couldnt
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couldn't
enter
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get
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the
train
. We
couldnt
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couldn't
use the
train
tickets. After
then
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, we
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the problem to
staff
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the staff
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but
staff
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the staff
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didnt
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didn't
explain the answer and he
didnt
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didn't
care about us.
Thats
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is
a
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realy
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really
unkindly
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behaviour.
Finally
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we missed the
train
and our tickets were rubbish. Our
expactations
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expectations
please help us.
Company
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The company
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can
be give
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a new
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new train tickets
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train
tickets. We lost a reservation but
its
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not important. We just want to learn why we
couldnt
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couldn't
get the
train
. And we want to a new
train
ticket gift. And of
course
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course,
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we
waiting
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apologize to the officer.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that your letter has a clear formatting structure with an appropriate greeting, introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use distinct paragraphs to present each idea, ensuring one idea per paragraph, offering clarity to your argument.
Task Achievement
Provide specific details about the problem with the tickets, including the date, time, and route of the intended journey.
Task Achievement
Adopt a more formal tone by employing polite language and a respectful register suitable for an official complaint.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • disappointed
  • inconvenience
  • frustrated
  • incompetent
  • unhelpful
  • inconsiderate
  • ruined
  • compensation
  • refund
  • apology
  • reimbursement
  • improvement
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