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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development.
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The maps illustrate the
center
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centre
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 of a tiny
town
 named
lslip
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slip
Islip
 as it is now, and plans for its expansion. In general, it is clear
lslip
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that lslip
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town
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Town
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 significantly
change
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changed
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 and
plan
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plans
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 to develop and will
be
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apply
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construction
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construct
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Road
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a Road
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 through the
town
, new housing,
shopping
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a shopping
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center
,
bus
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a bus
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 station car park…,
while
 some places and buildings stay and
do
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are
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 not
demolish
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demolished
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. Looking at the map of
lslip
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Islip
slip
town
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Town
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,
first
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the first
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 construction and
extend
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extension
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 houses in
west
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the west
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 of south and east of north
the
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of the
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town
.After that, build new housing near the car park.
Next,
create
a pedestrians
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pedestrians
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 only between shops and
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the shopping
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shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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 and next to the shopping
center
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centre
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 will be
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built
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build
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built
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 a bus station and a car park.
On the other hand
,
school
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schools
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,
park
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parks
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,
shops
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and shops
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 in
middle
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the middle
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 of
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the lslip
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lslip
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Islip
slip
town
 and housing from
south
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the south
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 remain and
transforms
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transform
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 a little.
all
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All
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 in all the
lslip
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slip
Islip
town
 plans
development
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for development
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 extend and will be
costruction
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construction
 modern places and facilities.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words center, town, lslip with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Small town
  • Centre
  • Development
  • Maps
  • Plans
  • Introduce
  • Topic
  • Purpose
  • Essay
  • Description
  • Current
  • Key features
  • Facilities
  • Advantages
  • Positive aspects
  • Benefits
  • Proposed
  • Changes
  • Improvements
  • Suggested
  • Potential
  • Course of action
  • Summarize
  • Opinion
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