The graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six diseases in Someland in 1990 with the amount of research funding allocated to each of those diseases.

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The graphs compare the number of deaths caused by six diseases in Someland in 1990 with the amount of research funding allocated to each of those diseases.

With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM food. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this

As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Education should be free to all people and should be paid for and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

While studying abroad provides an opportunity to broaden one’s experience, as also present the danger of letting influence from the host culture. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Marriage is seen as animportant part of life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of marrying a person at a young age? Explain.