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Some people think that planting trees in open space in cities and towns is more important than building houses.To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #trees #space #cities #towns #houses
Despite the fact that some people find
more
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it more
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 important
constructing
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to construct
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 new buildings, I
firmly
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am firmly
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 convinced that making green spaces in
cities
 is crucial. In
this
 essay, I am planning to spotlight some aspects which
explains
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 my point of view. Needless to mention that
generally
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generally,
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 the
cities
authotities
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authorities
 make
decision
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the decision
a decision
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 to expand the
biulding
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building
 construction because it is a profitable business. It is important to have
strong
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the strong
a strong
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economical
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economic
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 background for the
cities
.
Nevertheless
, I am sure that
this
 has its negative consequences
such
 as air and noise pollution, traffic jams in the areas where the constructions take place, and other inconveniences for the habitants
in
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of
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 the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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. Often new
biuldings
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buildings
building
raises
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arise
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 on the sites where plenty
trees
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of trees
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 used to be
grow
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grown
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.
Hence
, it is necessary to plant new ones.
In addition
,
lack
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the lack
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 of green areas in its turn
also
 has bad influences on people. As an example, I can point out reducing the
oxygen's
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oxygen
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 level in the air as it is
known
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a known
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 fact that
trees
 are the main source of
the
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apply
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oxygen. Another argument is a shade
which
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apply
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can save us
in
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on
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 hot summer days.
For instance
, in my native
country
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country,
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 the temperature in
summer time
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summertime
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raises
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rises
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 up to forty degrees
by
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apply
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celcius
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celsius
, and it becomes unbearable to walk outside if the
trees
 are cut for some
reasons
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reason
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. In conclusion,
inspite
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in spite
 of the importance of expanded building construction that incomes to
cities
'
economic
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economy
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,
the
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apply
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urban greening is
becomming
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becoming
 a vital need. We have to think about what if the
one day
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one-day
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 houses number become more
that
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than
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trees
 number.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • biodiversity
  • recreational areas
  • sustainable development
  • afforestation
  • carbon sequestration
  • photosynthesis
  • green infrastructure
  • heat island effect
  • property values
  • eco-friendly
  • mixed-use development
  • vertical gardens
  • rooftop parks
  • land-use planning
  • renewable resources
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