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Band 4.5

Some employers believe that job applicants’ social skills are more important than their academic qualifications. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 market, and
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 when evaluating job applicants. Some people argue that not only academic qualifications
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 highly required, but
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 extroversion is
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 is effective communication is a vital skill in any professional setting.
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 that employers value candidates who can express themself clearly
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interact confidently with their colleagues and handle client and other related professionals. The best illustration is
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customer service, an employer could able to communicate properly and address customer concerns to satisfy and express loyalty. Probing
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, strong social skills built an individual reputation, resolved conflicts, and collaborated with
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. On the other side, teamwork is another crucial aspect of the modern
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. Employers often prioritize candidates who can
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 collaboratively, contribute ideas practically
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, employers in construction project-based
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 have a combination of social skills to effectively coordinate with the workers and a theoretical understanding to solve problems that may arise on the construction site.
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, social skills demonstrate a candidate's ability and quality of
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 colleagues and
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 elaborate the knowledge and
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experience
 in a particular field. Effective communication and teamwork are fundamental to success in today's professional
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 environments. I believe that both played essential roles in the modern era.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interpersonal dynamics
  • Adaptability
  • Teamwork
  • Networking
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Conflict resolution
  • Academic credentials
  • Technical expertise
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Professional development
  • Career advancement
  • Specialization
  • Workplace harmony
  • Customer relations
  • Remote work
  • Digital communication
  • Job competency
  • Holistic assessment
  • Industry-specific skills
  • Work ethic
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