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Band 4.5

The apartment that you have rented was repaired recently. Later you discovered some defects in repairs. Write a letter to your landlord; In your letter. Explain what the problem is Suggest how it can be fixed Say what you would like the landlord to do about it

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Dear Ram, I hope you are doing well. As you know, I
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 been living in your flat since 2022 and I really appreciate that you repaired it
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 week. I would like to express some defects
that
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is
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 important to fix on
urgent
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an urgent
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 basis.
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, If I talk about the entry door
that is
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 not working properly
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 it makes some noise whenever I open it.
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, it is strange and scary sometimes. Other than
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, the lighting is very low and I am unable to complete my projects at
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night.
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, it can affect my eyes because I am a student and my exams are coming next month. But I need to work on some projects and finish
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before
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 the upcoming examinations. Now, I am requesting you to please arrange a team who can fix these issues as soon as possible so that I can focus on my studies properly. Thanks for consideration
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 sincerely Amit

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Improvement Suggestions

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greeting and closing

Ensure that the opening and closing of your letter follow standard formats. The greeting should include 'Mr./Mrs.' followed by the surname for formality unless you have an informal relationship. Also, close the letter with a proper sign-off such as 'Yours faithfully' or 'Yours sincerely' when the recipient's name is known.

logical structure

Work on structuring your paragraphs more effectively. Aim to introduce the issue clearly in the first paragraph, dedicate one paragraph to explain problems in detail, and use another to suggest solutions and your requests. This will enhance the logical flow and make it easier for the reader to follow.

complete response

Aim to complete the task by fully responding to all prompts given. If possible, expand on how the defects have affected you and offer more specific suggestions for resolution. For example, give a timeframe for when you'd like the repairs to be done or specify materials to be used if relevant.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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