The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.
The first bar chart illustrates the
proportion
of employers
having a preference to continue their degree in five different age
groups
and the second one figures the percentage of employers
who need time off and funding from their companies.
Overall
, The young choose to study for career enhancement, while
the older have preference
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a preference
to
only for interest. Change preposition
apply
There
is Correct pronoun usage
It
also
noticeable that employees under 26-year
old Correct your spelling
26 years
needs
more time-off and funding from their Correct subject-verb agreement
need
employers
.
The younger with
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apply
age
group below 26 has the highest ambition to continue their degree for career development with roughly 80%, followed with
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by
age
groups
26-29 and 30-39, at around 70 %and 60 %, respectively. In contrast
, the worker with age
above 49 has the largest proportion
to study for their interest, with a proportion
around 70%. There is only age
group of 40 -49 having the same Correct article usage
an age
proportion
at 40%, studying for career and interest.
On the other hand
, more than a
half of Correct article usage
apply
employers
in the age
groups
under 26 and 26-29 needs
support for day-off and funds, being the largest among other Correct subject-verb agreement
need
groups
, while
the others have the
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a
proportion
from roughly 30 % to 45%.Submitted by 2024successielts on
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