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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. *Fairtrade: a category of products for which farmers from developing countries have been paid an officially agreed fair price. You should write at least 150 words.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. *Fairtrade: a category of products for which farmers from developing countries have been paid an officially agreed fair price. You should write at least 150 words.
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The given table illustrates the rate of sale of labelled coffee and Bananas fairtrade over
a
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five years in
UK
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the UK
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, Switzerland, Denmark, Belgium and
sweden
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Sweden
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.
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, all five countries increased the fairtrade sales
with in
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from
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 1999 to 2004. By 2004 United Kingdom was in
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first place and Sweden was
the
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last
. And
other
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 three countries
also
 have had a
conciderable increament
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considerable increase
.
Morover
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,
1999
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 to 2004, in the UK there was a
mssive
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massive
 increase of 18.5
millions
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of
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Euros and went second place to first place by
outperfoming
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outperforming
Switzerland.
Despite
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, Switzerland
also
 has witnessed an escalation of
3million
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3 million
 Euros
of
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 their the fairtrade sales.
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 the
table
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 other given three
europian
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European
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 countries
also
 have faced a slight development from 1.8, 1, and 0.8 to 2, 1.7 and 1,
respectvlly
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respectively
 from 1999 to 2004.
Notably
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 there was a
similer
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similar
 growth of of their sales in Denmark and Sweden by 0.2 million Euros.
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