The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
These graphs
shows
the evolution of cutting materials in the age. It is clear from the graphs that the Change the verb form
show
shape
of the tools was changed during ( 1.4 to 0.8) millions
years ago.
Add the preposition
millions of
According to
what is shown, front
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the front
view
tool became circular shape
rather that it was long tapered,but both of them Change preposition
in shape
sharp
from the top, Add a missing verb
were sharp
also
their highest were same
. Correct article usage
the same
Similariliy
Correct your spelling
Similarly
Similarily
for
Change preposition
to
back
Correct article usage
the back
view
, it's
Correct your spelling
its
shape
looks similar to front
Correct article usage
the front
view
and had similar
alternate with Correct article usage
a similar
servival
sharp top between 1.4 Correct article usage
a servival
millions year
ago and 0.8 Fix the agreement mistake
million years
millions year
ago.
As for Fix the agreement mistake
million years
slide
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the slide
view
, it's
Correct your spelling
its
wieght
dropped and became very thin, so it was easier to take and cut.
Correct your spelling
weight
To sum up
, we could say that side
Correct article usage
the side
view
was the easiest tool to cut. Unlike, front
and back Correct article usage
the front
view
which Fix the agreement mistake
views
they
had Correct pronoun usage
apply
hieger
Correct your spelling
higher
wieght
Correct your spelling
width
also
Correct word choice
and also
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an unconfortable
unconfortable
Correct your spelling
uncomfortable
shape
.Fix the agreement mistake
shapes
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shape, view with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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